Talk:Rokyamut

Comma

Within the phrase combat rogue cosmic disasters or dangerous aliens like the Dominion of the Black and minions of the Great Old Ones, Dominion of the Black and minions of the Great Old Ones are intended to be examples of dangerous aliens, which are two of the threats in question. Placing a comma after and minions of the Great Old Ones will change the meaning of the phrase, making minions of the Great Old Ones an independent item equal to cosmic disasters and dangerous aliens, which is not the intended meaning and does not make much sense to me. - HTD (talk) 03:33, 7 July 2019 (UTC)

It could do with rewording, HTD, then, to clarify and to make it easier to read by breaking up the heavily loaded sentence. --Fleanetha (talk) 21:39, 7 July 2019 (UTC)

I tried to reword it to be more explicit, while keeping the original intention. I haven't read the source yet, so feel free to roll it back if I miss-wrote -- Cpt kirstov (talk) 15:53, 10 July 2019 (UTC)